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Free高考英语续写第一节课

题型综述----续写

续写本质就是写故事

成就故事的关键

（发现自己是哪个方面比较不足）

1故事技能

2文学技能

故事的六要素：结构 事件 场景 节奏 顺序 幕

故事体现价值

Continuation

ACT1(1-2段)背景 价值

ACT 2 特定事件 主要人物

ACT 3 价值 提出解决方案

第二节课

思路第一 之后再考虑高级用语

价值：帮助他人

人物：母亲、三个孩子、帮助对象Bernard

线索：make popcorns挣钱

续写要求：

1.动作尽可能的细致-拆解动作

2.加入适当的内容补充——介词短语、副词、形容词

3.加入适当的人物心理活动 (加在主角身上)——复杂心理 正反两面

e.g 在开心的时候还会有其他感受

4.使用人物直接话语——避免对话（因为对话的格式不好写）

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母亲赞同——开始做

场景：制作爆米花——在家/厨房 室内

节奏：母亲在干什么？Clara/Harry/John在干什么？分工

顺序：在……之前、在……之后、同时（就三个）

两个动作同时 doing sth,sb did sth 一个人

两个动作先后 having done sth，sb did sth 一个人

所以他们就开始做了。

Clara负责准备corns，同时Harry负责准备paper bags，John负责邀请Bernard

听了这个想法，Bernard很感动，但是他有些不自信，因为他从来没有做过类似的事情，“我们一起肯定没问题”，John说服了他

在母亲的帮助下，四个孩子一起做好了爆米花

So their preparation started immediately.

（注意：写sth. start ，不写they start）

Clara brought the box of corns from the kitchen,while Harry offered to buy some paper bags from the nearby grocery.(Harry offered to find some white papaer and make bags for the popcorn)

In the meantime,John went to Bernard's house and invited him to join in.

Hearing this idea,Bernard was quite grateful,but little nervous，for he had never done such things before .

"We can make it together!"John persuaded him.

（后面一定会卖出去，所以如果前面写他怀疑卖不卖的出去就有了情节的小起伏）

That mornign,with the guidance and encouragement of Meredith,the four kids managed to make delicious popcorn

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伯纳德开始卖爆米花

场景：卖爆米花——街上 室外

Followed by the other ikds,he walked along the street,holding a sigh reading "Popcorn for $1".People were curious at first.After learning the situation,they all took out their wallet and bought one sharp to support Beranrd.In a short while,the popcorn was sold out.Bernard was so touched that tears welled up in his eyes.He expressed heartfelt thanks to Meredith and her children.Ths was a special day for everyone,for they learned that even in the hardest time,there was hope if we helped each other. 价值 中心主题

段落结尾：1.动作结果 我们完成了清洁工作

2.自身感受 虽然工作很辛苦，但是每个人都很投入

3.他人评价 我们的工作得到了路人的一致赞赏

4.中心主题：我们明白了劳动的价值（仅限文章结尾）

第三节课

2021年武汉四调续写

Walking across campus with every pair of eyes on you can be embarrassing, especially when you’re 13 years old. I looked around me in desperate search of a friendly face, a smile, anything. I was quite disappointed, to say the least. And I, in turn, felt somewhat foolish, walking across campus with a false smile on my face. I was simply attempting to follow the advice my mother had given me years before: when things get awkward, smile. No matter where you are, a smile will always be understood. A smile is universal. At that very moment, however, I felt my mother’s advice didn’t work. 负

1 作者在校园里负态度 —— 文章表面

2 母亲的建议无效到有效的转变 —— 文章预判

3 文章重要线索：微笑 —— 文章内在

On top of it all, my mind was racing with questions and concerns typical of any 13-year-old on the first day of school: where would I sit at lunch? Who would I talk to? Not to mention, how would I make friends when I didn’t even speak the language? My heartbeat quickened, and I felt nervous. Still, I did my best to maintain calm so as not to let my guard down and reveal to others just how scared I truly was. 负

作者身份：13岁美国女孩转学到中国校园里的第一天

When the teacher introduced me to the class as the “American girl”, 10 sets of hands immediately shot up. Some students had questions, others wanted to practice their English with me. Because I didn’t speak much Chinese yet, I communicated with the other students through hand motions mixed in with broken English and Chinese. Despite the attention, I wasn’t sure how much of it was positive. It was almost as if they weren’t sure what to make of me and I was being examined. Then again, who could blame them? After all, I was the first American ever to attend the school. So essentially, we were all first timers. 负

Then came the first class – Chinese painting. 负

1 作者遇到问题 — 尴尬 — 与前文有关

2 为什么会出现这种问题 — 与前文有关

3 遇到问题时作者有什么感受和心理活动

To tell the truth, I made every last bit of effort to catch up with the teacher’s words, but still couldn’t understand what he was instructing at all. Then all the students were required to finish a piece of work on their own. Seeing those strange drawing tools and the blank paper on the desk, I felt really stressed because I had no idea where to start, also afraid of others laughing at my weakness.

As I burnt with great embarrassment, Li Hua, who was next to me, gave me a warm smile. 负—正

1 作者的问题解决 — 有人相助

2 怎么解决的问题 — 别人教会你怎么做（系列动作）

3 解决问题之后作者有什么感受和心理活动 — 爽

4 文章结尾突出中心 — 微笑

第四节课

2021年福建质检续写

When my daughters reached the third and fourth grades, I occasionally allowed them to walk to and from school alone if the weather permitted. One warm spring day, a little dog followed them home after school. It had short legs and long lovely ears, with a fawn-colored coat. It was the cutest dog I had ever seen and the girls begged me to keep it.

作者的女儿捡到了一条可爱的小狗

The dog was barely twelve weeks old. It had no collar or identifying marks of any sort. I didn’t know what to do. I thought about running an advertisement in the lost-and-found but I really didn’t want to. It would break the kids’ hearts if someone should show up. Besides, its owners should have watched it more closely. 作者心理活动：不想把狗还回去

By the end of the week the dog was part of our family. It was very intelligent and good with the girls. The following week something told me to check the lost-and-found section in the local paper. One particular advertisement jumped out at me and my heart pounded with fear at what I read. Someone was begging for the return of a lost dog in the neighborhood of our grade school. They sounded desperate. My hand shook. I couldn’t bring myself to pick up the phone. 

作者心理活动：内心不安，看到找狗，更加不安

Instead, I pretended I hadn’t seen the advertisement. I quickly put the paper away in the drawer and continued with my dusting. I never said a word about it to the kids or my husband.

作者心理活动：掩饰

By now we had named the dog. It looked like a Molly, so that was what we called it. It followed the girls everywhere they went. When they went outside, it was one step behind them. When they did housework, it was there to lend a hand. 狗和家人关系融洽（反衬）

描述心理活动的写法

1 直接使用情感词汇 I am happy.

2 使用表述情感的短语或句型

My face lit up like a Christmas tree.

Joy danced all the way to my heart.

3 如实写出内心的真实想法

4 通过周围环境或人物动作进行反衬

There was only one problem with this otherwise perfect picture: my conscience (良心) was bothering me. I knew in my heart I had to call that number and see if our Molly was the dog they were desperately seeking. It was the most difficult thing I’ve ever done.

作者心理活动：良心煎熬、抉择

With mixed feelings, I finally picked up the phone. How I wish there would be no one to answer, or someone would just say the dog had already been found. But none of these happened. On the other end was a voice of a middle-aged woman, who listened to my description of the dog and immediately offered to come over. During the conversation, Molly sat quietly at my side, rubbing my waist with its tiny warm body. It was only less than 30 minutes before the doorbell rang, but to me it seemed to last a century. I opened the door and my worry was standing right in front of me.

I asked the woman to come in and she quickly bent over and hugged Molly tightly. The dog hesitated for a second, then it started wagging its tail and barking excitedly as if it had recognized someone familiar. My heart sank. It was just like my worst nightmare coming into reality that Molly did belong to that woman. She offered to give me some cash as a reward, but I refused. Actually I would very much like to pay a good sum of money to keep Molly instead. The woman appreciated once again and took Molly away, leaving me alone in this empty and unfamiliar house.

作者不想还 — 必须还 — 郁闷

把人不能解决的问题交给狗去解决：是否合理？

女人把狗送给我们了：是否合理？

第五节课

2021年苏锡常镇二模续写

I was still a thief when I met Anil. And though only 15, I was an experienced and fairly successful hand.

人物： 我——盗贼 15

Anil——作家 25

Anil was about 25 – a tall, thin fellow – and he looked easy-going, kind and simple enough for my purpose. I might be able to get into his confidence.

I gave him my most appealing smile. “I want to work for you.” I said.

“But I can’t pay you.”

Perhaps I had misjudged the man. I asked, “Can you feed me?”

“Can you cook?”

“I can cook.” I lied.

“If you can cook, then I can feed you.”

The meal I cooked that night must have been terrible because Anil gave it to a stray dog and told me to be off. But I just hung around smiling in my most appealing way, and he couldn’t help laughing.

Later he patted me on the head and said never mind, he’d teach me to cook. He also taught me to write my name and said he would soon teach me to write whole sentences and to add numbers. I was grateful. I knew that once I could write like an educated man there would be no limit to what I could achieve.

One evening he came home with a small bundle of notes（钞票）, saying he had just sold a book to a publisher. At night, I saw him put the money under the mattress (床垫).

It’s time I did some real work, I told myself. After all, he doesn’t even pay me.

续写：重点关注文章里的重复信息

Anil was asleep. I crept up to the bed. Anil was sleeping peacefully. My hand slid under the mattress, searching for the notes. When I found them, I drew them out without a sound. Anil sighed in his sleep and turned on his side, towards me. I was frightened and quickly crawled out of the room.

作家知不知道我在偷钱？

知道—没有制止我—为什么？—有信心、善良—改变

不知道—情节如何发展？

续写：当情节出现分支选择时，重点关注故事性塑造

I began to run, holding the notes by the string of my pajamas (睡衣). But I slowed down and sat down in the shelter of the clock tower. I should go back to Anil, I told myself, if only to learn to read and write. 醒悟

I hurried back to the room feeling very nervous.心理

In my thief career, it was the first time I returned something I had stolen. 心理出现的原因

I opened the door quietly. 动作 实写

With the moonlight through the window, I could see Anil was still sleeping. 环境描写 烘托气氛 虚写

I crept up to the bed and slid my hand under the mattress again. 动作 实写

The room was deadly silent as if I could hear his breath. 环境描写 烘托气氛 虚写

I bit my lip and put the notes back, 动作 实写

feeling his gentle eyes were staring at me all the time, but he didn’t. 感受 环境 虚写

“单人连续动作+心理活动”写作方法

续写：写作内容四大类—动作、情感、环境、言语

续写：连续动作可以不连续写，动作之间可以插入环境描述或情感描述

续写：写动作用短句，写插入用长句

我走进房间

房间似乎和平时并没有什么两样

拿起一本书

这本书我看过很多次了，但是这次的感觉有点不一样

翻开书的中间

让我意外的是

发现一封信

I awoke late next morning to find that Anil had already made the tea. 视角：我

He asked me to sit across the table and handed me a white envelope. 视角：他

To my surprise, there was a $20 note in it. 我

“This is your weekly wage,” he voice echoed in my head, “Now you are a decent man with a formal job.”

他

I raised my head and met his easy-going, kind and simple look in the eyes. At that moment, something buried deeply in my heart awoke. I tried to say some words, but I failed. 我 最后一次

“Finish your breakfast and we will begin today’s class,” he said. 他 最后一次

两方互动的写作方法

续写：视角交替转换，主角轮流出现

作家与我互动

教育——难写/字数不够用

不教育——好写/可发挥空间大

续写：挑选简单的内容来编写情节

全文呈现

I hurried back to the room feeling very nervous. In my thief career, it was the first time I returned something I had stolen. I opened the door quietly. With the moonlight through the window, I could see Anil was still sleeping. I crept up to the bed and slid my hand under the mattress again. The room was deadly silent as if I could hear his breath. I bit my lip and put the notes back, feeling his gentle eyes were staring at me all the time, but he didn’t.

I awoke late next morning to find that Anil had already made the tea. He asked me to sit across the table and handed me a white envelope. To my surprise, there was a $20 note in it. “This is your weekly wage,” he voice echoed in my head, “Now you are a decent man with a formal job.” I raised my head and met his easy-going, kind and simple look in the eyes. At that moment, something buried deeply in my heart awoke. I tried to say some words, but I failed. “Finish your breakfast and we will begin today’s class,” he said. 

第六节课

2021年潍坊二模续写

I am a proud mother of three children, my last little one being delivered in the middle of this pandemic. She was born in August and her name is Aida.

Shortly after having Aida, my mother-in-law Ann showed me something she learned from her friend’s mother in an art class she attended weekly. She had showed me how to knit (编织) a scarf. She showed me stitches (针) and gave me her half done project.

I spent a lot of time breastfeeding my sweet little girl, so I had some extra time to do something with my hands throughout the day. I enjoyed making the scarf so I purchased tons of yarn (线) since it was winter. I wanted to make scarves for my three children as Christmas gifts. 背景

There was a new family that moved in down the street. The only daughter of the family was Jane, a shy girl, aged 14, the same age of my oldest son David. It seemed that she came from a financially disadvantaged family, for she always wore old clothes. Worse still, in such cold days, she had no more clothes to wear and trembled with cold. 问题

Due to the pandemic, society was thrown into crisis mode. Schools were closed, food supplies and deliveries were suspended and children were stuck at home. In such discouraging times, however, they became good companions, talking and playing at home or around the houses. 友谊

It was dreadfully cold this winter. Every time David came back from outside, with red face, he always cried, “Mum, it is freezing outside!” Then, he came over to see whether I finished the scarf. I could tell how impatient he was to wear my scarf sooner! I had to speed the project to satisfy his expectation. But David comforted me saying he could wait a few days. What a kind and considerate boy he was! Then my great art project finally was accomplished on the morning ahead of Christmas.

我：三个孩子的母亲 做围巾 proud 

Jane：邻居家的女儿 穷 冷 shy

David：我的大儿子 Jane的朋友 kind / considerate

Ann：我的岳母 教我织围巾

Aida：我的小女儿 刚出生

我——David——Jane

I wrapped the scarf around David’s neck.

His eyes widened with joy and his face lit up like a Christmas tree.

表情 眼神 — 抽象

“Thank you, Mom”, he gave me a big hug and kissed me on the cheek, “This is the best Christmas gift I’ve ever received!” 

言语 动作 — 具体

Then he couldn’t wait to go outside and show off his new scarf. 情节发展

I was relieved and satisfied, not just because I finished my project, but because I was truly able to bring happiness to the children in such depressing times. 心理活动+原因 由表及里

孩子表现 — 说话、表情、眼神、肢体动作（禁止写心理活动）

母亲心理 — 心理活动（写作方法）

孩子举动 — 出去

Later that day David came back saying Jane also deserved a scarf.

He seemed to bear something in mind but was hesitated to speak out, so I encouraged him to share his thought with me. 情节发展

“Can I give this scarf to Jane? She really needs it.” he murmured. 孩子言语

I nodded to him and told him I was very proud to have a boy like him who truly cared for others. 我的回应

Getting my approval, David excitedly rushed out to find Jane, while I picked up the stitches and yarn again. 孩子举动+我的举动

“Three scarves to go,” I thought, feeling a warmth inside. 我的心理活动

我 David

织围巾 期待

给他戴围巾 感谢

鼓励他说出来 有心事

赞同肯定 要送别

继续织围巾 跑出去送

骄傲、温暖

全文呈现

I wrapped the scarf around David’s neck. His eyes widened with joy and his face lit up like a Christmas tree. “Thank you, Mom”, he gave me a big hug and kissed me on the cheek, “This is the best Christmas gift I’ve ever received!” Then he couldn’t wait to go outside and show off his new scarf. I was relieved and satisfied, not just because I finished my project, but because I was truly able to bring happiness to the children in such depressing times. 

Later that day David came back saying Jane also deserved a scarf. He seemed to bear something in mind but was hesitated to speak out, so I encouraged him to share his thought with me. “Can I give this scarf to Jane? She really needs it.” he murmured. I nodded to him and told him I was very proud to have a boy like him who truly cared for others. Getting my approval, David excitedly rushed out to find Jane, while I picked up the stitches and yarn again. “Three scarves to go,” I thought, feeling a warmth inside.

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