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我的笔记绝对不会只靠截图或者去抄老师的讲义糊弄过去，其中会尽可能多加入东西，陶大讲的东西、没讲完整的东西我会一同补全

这篇笔记是我在4月9日写的，已经有同学捷足先登，有很多优秀的笔记，我也从中学到了很多，在此力求我的笔记能做到追赶超越，不信敬请看罢

视频总结+详细笔记+补充参考

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续写要求

1 动作尽可能细致一拆解动作

2 加入适当的内容补充一介词短语、副词

3 加入适当的人物心理活动一复杂心理

4 使用人物直接话语 避免对话

如果还有机会听老师细讲读后续写中点评和总结就抓住机会好好听

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1️⃣ 思路分析

1、经典情节：因果逻辑，封闭结尾（结局要完），线性时间，外部冲突，单一主角，现实视角，积极人物

2、小情节：开放结尾，内部冲突（一个人的内心冲突），多主角，消极人物

3、反情节：偶然巧合，非线性时间，非现实视角

2️⃣本文具体思路

母亲赞同——开始做

场景：制作爆米花——在家/厨房 室内

节奏：母亲在干什么？Clara/Harry/John在干什么？分工！

顺序：在……之前、在……之后、同时（就三个）

思路句型：

两个动作同时 doing sth,sb did sth 一个人

两个动作先后 having done sth，sb did sth 一个人

3️⃣ 句子设计

1.将人物主体转化成事物主体

所以他们开始准备了：

so their preparation started immediately.

转变思路：事情准备发生了，而不是我们准备做什么事情了

2.拆解动作，让动作尽可能精细

• Clare准备corns,Harry准备paper bags：

Clare brought the box of corn from the kitchen， while Harry offered to buy some paper bags from the near by grocery.

应该注意：过去时brought，offered

+单复数corns

• In the meantime,John went to Bernard's house,told him their idea, and invited him to join in.
• Bernard 同意加入 （情节发展）

Hearing his idea,Bernard was quite grateful but a little nervous,for（因为） he had never done such things before. "We can make it together！" John peisuaded him.

• 在母亲的帮助下，四个孩子一起做好了爆米花 （结果) That morning,with the help from Meredith,the four kids made popcorn together.→ That morning,with the guidance from Meredith,the four kids managed to made delicious popcorn eventually .

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So their preparation started immediately. Clara brought the box of com from the kitchen,while Harry offered to buy some paper bags from the nearby grocery. In the meantime,John went to Bernard's house and invited him to join in.Hearing his idea,Bernard was qquite grateful but a little nervous,for he hadInever done such things before. "We can make it togetherl" John persuaded him.That morning,with the guidance and encouragement from Meredith,the four kids managed to make delicious popcorn.

“同时”的高级表达：in the meantime