雅思大作文，讨论肥胖是家长还是快餐负责？

The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing.

Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion

折中式写法, 认为双方都该负责任

P1

Recent discussions of obesity have successfully raised people’s attention.

A controversial issue has been whether parents or fast food industry should be blamed for it.

I contend that the both two contribute to the problem .

P2 家长应该负责

1 One the one hand ,it is the parents ,and not other factors ,who are responsible for their children’s obesity.

2 That is to say ,parents as the only official guardians ,are able to supervise what the kids eat and other physical conditions related.

3 Besides ,it is suggested that parents could encourage kids or even engage themselves with kids in the numerous activities to exercise instead of throwing kids in front of big screens or indulging them in fast food void.

4 By contrast , compared to parents ,there is no other third party that could have as powerful influence as parents do.

5 Consequently ,if the kids become overweight because of the delinquency of their parents ,I could not imagine that parents could find other excuses.

P2 快餐也应该负责

1 On the other hand ,the fast food industry does fuel the obesity epidemic in modern society by producing endless unhealthy food .

2 More specifically ,they not only fail to provide explicit labels about how many calories their food contains, but also they try to hide the fact that the over added sugar ,fat and other chemicals are likely to result in the weight problem.

3 As working parents are occupied by work , children today are easily victimized by the low-cost plus no-value, while calorie-filled and easy addicted food sold in the easy-found fast food chain.

4 For instance ,MCD has always been criticized as the factory pouring junk food from its flow line production to kids.

5 If these kind of entrepreneurs could simply wave their hands and avoid being criticized for this“social illness”, the public will not agree.

P4

In conclusion , I am sure that no one prefers a world with a multitude of children carrying big bellis and out of breath after walks. In order to attack the outweight of the young ,both parents and fast food industry should shoulder their duties as supervising and catering quality food respectively. In addition, certain laws should be enacted by the government to regulate the misleading information in the media towards kids.

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