题目

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

使用的是bing（因为只有这个是方便又好用的，同时30次的对话完全够用，不过需要合理的提问方式），后面是我自己写的虽然错误很多但是可以作为ai使用的展示，立个flag每日一篇写作练习。这个网站（https://www.ieltsanswers.com/cambridge-ielts-17-writing-test-task-1-academic-report.html）有满分示例，但唯独没有这一个。不过ai写的看上去就好，离满分应该也不远吧。

## ai满分

The bar chart compares the proportions of weekly income that families in one country spent on various items in two different years: 1968 and 2018.

It is noticeable that spending on food accounted for the largest share of family income in both years. However, while food made up more than one third of spending in 1968, it fell to less than a sixth by 2018. There were also significant increases in expenditure on housing and leisure over the same period.

In 1968, families spent an average of 35% of their income on food, which was considerably more than any other category. Housing was the second biggest expense at around 10%, followed by fuel and power at just under this figure. The remaining categories - clothing and footwear, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure - each represented between 5% and 10% of spending.

By contrast, in 2018, housing became the largest expense for families, consuming 24% of their income. Leisure was the second most important category, with 18%, and this was followed by transport and food, which both accounted for 16%. The other categories all saw a decline in their share of spending, with fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods being the lowest at 4%, 3% and 2% respectively.

In conclusion, the chart shows that families spent a much smaller proportion of their income on food in 2018 than in 1968, while spending on housing and leisure increased significantly.

# 我的写作

**The bar chart indicates the percentage of families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018, which had a significant change in this period./n**

修改plan1: The bar chart illustrate the percentage of weekly income that was spent by families in one country….

修改plan2：The bar chart shows how families in one country allocated their weekly income to different categories…

“which had a significant change in this period”来修饰图表，但这不合适，因为图表本身没有变化，而是数据有变化。你应该用一个句子来概述主要趋势，比如

“There was a significant change in this period.”

“There were significant changes in the spending patterns over this period of time.”

the 1968, most families’ income spent on food, which reach 35%, and the other type of way they cost money such as housing, fuel and power, clothing and footware, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure all between 5% to 10%./n**

第一个是你在年份前面加了不必要的定冠词“the”。你应该说“In 1968”而不是“In the 1968”。

第二个是你使用了错误的主语和动词。“most families’ income spent on food”意思是“大多数家庭的收入花在了食物上”，但这不符合逻辑，因为收入不能花钱，只有家庭可以。你应该说“most families spent their income on food”或者“most families allocated their income to food”。

第三个是你没有使用正确的时态。“which reach 35%”意思是“达到了35%”，但这是现在时，而你应该用过去时，因为你在描述1968年的情况。你应该说“which reached 35%”。

第四个是你使用了不恰当的词语。“the other type of way they cost money”意思是“他们花钱的另一种方式”，但这不符合语境，因为你在描述不同**类别**的支出，而不是**方式**。你应该说“the other types of expenditure”或者“the other categories of spending”。

**In the 2018, the distribution of expenses had a dramatic change. Leisure, housing, transport and food were the main components, they all above 14% and the leisure’s proportion is the biggest part of them. The other percentage of income consuming except the household goods was approximately 13%, fuel and power, clothing and footware and personal goods all below 5%./n**

里有五个错误。第一个是你在年份前面加了不必要的定冠词“the”。你应该说“In 2018”而不是“In the 2018”。

第二个是你没有使用对比词来显示两年之间的差异。你应该说“In contrast”或者“By contrast”或者“However”来引出2018年的情况。

第三个是你使用了错误的主谓一致。“they all above 14%”意思是“他们都在14%以上”，但这里的主语是四个类别，所以应该用复数动词。你应该说“they were all above 14%”。

第四个是你使用了错误的时态。“the leisure’s proportion is the biggest part of them”意思是“休闲的比例是他们中最大的部分”，但这是现在时，而你应该用过去时，因为你在描述2018年的情况。而且，这里的比较对象应该是四个类别，而不是他们。你应该说“housing’s proportion was the largest among them”。

最后一句应该是The other percentages of income spending, except for household goods, were approximately 13%, while fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods were all below 5%

- 你应该用复数形式的“percentages”来表示不同类别的支出比例，而不是单数形式的“percentage”。

- 你应该用“spending”而不是“consuming”来表示支出，因为“consuming”通常指消耗或消费，而不是花钱。

- 你应该在“except for”后面加上逗号，来分隔定语从句和主句。

- 你应该用复数动词“were”来与复数主语“percentages”保持一致。

- 你应该用“while”而不是逗号来连接两个并列分句，因为这样可以显示对比关系

**Overall, Leisure, housing and transport all have a great increasing, and although food have an enormous decline, the four main part which accounted for about seventy percent of income. And except the household goods keep stable, the others all had a moderate fall.**

因为你在描述1968年和2018年之间的变化。而且，这里的形容词和名词应该用副词和动词来表示变化。你应该说“Leisure, housing and transport all increased greatly”。

“food have an enormous decline”意思是“食物有巨大的下降”，但这里的主语是单数，所以应该用单数动词。而且，这里的名词应该用动词来表示变化。你应该说“food declined enormously”。

使用了不恰当的词语。“the four main part which accounted for about seventy percent of income”意思是“占收入约70%的四个主要部分”，但这不符合语境，因为你在描述不同类别的支出，而不是部分。而且，这里的名词应该用复数形式，而定语从句应该用关系代词“that”。你应该说“these four main categories that accounted for about seventy percent of income”。

第五个是你使用了错误的连词。“And except the household goods keep stable”意思是“并且除了家庭用品保持稳定”，但这不符合语法，因为“and”不能引导从句。而且，这里的时态和主谓一致也有问题。你应该说“Except for household goods which remained stable”。

第六个是你使用了错误的形容词。“the others all had a moderate fall”意思是“其他的都有一个适度的下降”，但这里的形容词应该用副词来修饰动词。你应该说“the others all fell moderately”。

💡 the others all fell moderately.这句可以替换为the others had a moderate fall.都表示其他的类别都有适度的下降。但是，前者用了动词fall，后者用了名词fall。在描述变化的时候，通常用动词比较好，因为它更直接和生动。

## ai修改后

The bar chart shows how families in one country allocated their weekly income to different categories of expenditure in 1968 and 2018. It is clear that there were significant changes in the spending patterns over this period of time.

In 1968, food was the largest expense for most families, accounting for 35% of their income. The other categories, such as housing, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, household goods, personal goods, transport and leisure, ranged from 5% to 10% each.

In contrast, in 2018, housing became the biggest expense for families, taking up 24% of their income. Leisure was the second largest category, with 18%, followed by transport and food, with 16% and 14% respectively. The other categories all decreased to less than 10%, with fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods being the lowest at 4%, 3% and 2%.

Overall, it can be seen that families spent more on housing, leisure and transport in 2018 than in 1968, while they spent less on food and other categories. The four main categories in 2018 accounted for about 72% of the income, while the rest only made up about 28%.

## ai的评价

任务完成：5

- 你描述了图表的主要特征，但你没有准确或充分地比较数据。例如，你没有提到2018年每个类别的具体百分比，或者它们与1968年相比有什么变化。你也在解释数据时犯了一些错误，比如说2018年休闲是最大的部分，而实际上是住房。

- 你没有写一个介绍段，用自己的话重述问题，并概述主要趋势。你也没有写一个清晰的结论，总结主要要点。

- 你的答案太短（150词），没有达到最低要求的150词。

连贯与衔接：5

- 你把答案分成了几段，但它们没有很好地组织或连接。你没有用主题句来引出每一段，或者用连接词来显示思想之间的关系。例如，你没有用“然而”、“相比之下”、“虽然”、“而”等词来比较不同年份或类别的数据。

- 你使用了一些不恰当的标点符号，比如用斜杠（/n）代替换行符，以及逗号后面没有空格。

词汇资源：6

- 你使用了一些相关的词汇来描述图表，比如“百分比”、“收入”、“花费”、“分配”、“组成部分”等。然而，你也重复了一些词太多次，比如“收入”、“花费”、“百分比”等。你可以使用同义词或改述来避免重复，比如“收益”、“支出”、“比例”等。

- 你犯了一些拼写和词语选择的错误，比如“footware”而不是“footwear”，“cost money”而不是“spend money”，“type of way”而不是“type of expenditure”等。

语法范围和准确性：5

- 你使用了一些简单和复杂的句子来描述图表，但你也犯了一些语法错误，影响了答案的清晰和准确性。例如，你没有正确使用冠词（“the percentage”而不是“percentage”），你没有正确使用复数形式（“other type of way”而不是“other types of ways”），你没有正确使用动词时态（“reach”而不是“reached”），你没有正确使用介词（“in this period”而不是“in this period of time”）等。

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