雅思写作 教师or家长对孩子成长影响大

Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

【题目翻译】一旦孩子开始上学，老师对他们的智力和社交发展的影响比父母更大。你对这个说法在多大程度上同意或不同意？

【审题分析】

题目关键词：孩子的智力/社交成长(child development)，家长or老师的影响

题目：to what extent agree or disagree

• 为了全面地回应题干要求，在task response中拿到更高的分数，我们要对题目进行双面讨论，即阐述1）老师可能造成影响更大的原因；2）家长可能造成影响更大的原因，最后再下结论

第一段，引入段，改写题目，介绍自己的观点。

The development of children, including their academic progress and interpersonal skills, is a complex and collaborative process that involves both teachers and parents. However, varying opinions exist on the extent of influence each group has once children start school. While some argue that teachers assume a more significant role, a comprehensive analysis of the factors shaping children’s growth may offer a different perspective.

第二段，让步段，介绍老师可能造成更大影响的原因。这里需要⚠️的是，因为题干提到了学术和社交两方面的发展，我们的论述也需要cover这两个方面，才能算是全面地回应题干要求。

Undeniably, teachers exert substantial influence over children’s intellectual and social development. School attendance means that children spend a considerable portion of their time in the classroom with their teachers. Compared to the limited time spent at home with parents outside of school hours or on weekends, this extended classroom interaction offers teachers more opportunities to impact their students. Moreover, teachers are responsible for imparting knowledge and fostering positive behaviours through the establishment of a constructive and structured classroom environment. As the primary setting for students to acquire subject matter knowledge, interact with peers, and navigate social norms, the methods of instruction employed by teachers, coupled with the rules and expectations they set, inevitably shape children’s academic and social development.

第三段，反驳段，介绍家长仍然对孩子成长有很大影响的原因。同样，我们也要从学术和社交两个方面进行阐述。

However, it would be hasty to conclude that teachers hold the predominant influence over children's development. Parents can also exert a profound impact as they are a child’s first caregivers and educators, and they maintain a continuous presence throughout a child’s life. From a very young age and on a daily basis, parents may instill values, beliefs, habits, and cultural norms that lay the foundation for child’s later intellectual and social development. Also, unlike teachers in the traditional classrooms, parents have the opportunity to provide individualized attention, tailoring their support and guidance to their child's unique needs and interests in both academic and social domains. Therefore, it is evident that parents also hold the primary role in shaping children’s development.

最后，总结段，总结我的观点。

In conclusion, I firmly believe that both teachers and parents play equally indispensable roles in a child’s development, with their influences often synergizing to yield the most positive outcomes. Effective collaboration between these two influential groups can optimize a child’s growth and overall well-being, underscoring the importance of a unified approach to education. (355 words)